[Editor's Note: This is an essay from one of the finalists in our scholarship competition. I have no financial relationship with any of the finalists, except the eventual winner, who will get a big check from WCI.]
Because my parents raised me to be goal-oriented, it did not surprise me when my dad asked me to write my goals for the next ten years when I was only nine. My goals focused on helping people and protecting the environment. Most importantly, I wanted to build and to run orphanages in Africa. However, ten years later when I stepped off a plane in Zambia, Africa, I planned only to volunteer at a school for handicapped children. Although I did eventually build an orphanage, my time in Zambia made me realize that I could have a wider, more powerful impact on people in need if I would become a doctor.
I drew this conclusion early in my stay when I left my sheltered and guarded compound to experience life from the perspective of the local people. I witnessed child prostitution, malnourishment, disease, poverty and corruption; however, I also saw a beautiful and complex culture. I wanted to make a difference outside of my protected walls, so I traveled two hours to visit an AIDS hospice for the dying and terminally ill.
Immediately, as I walked into the small hospice, I smelled rotting bodies and saw skeletons lying on mats screaming in pain. Although in shock and wanting to run away, I knew I had to remain calm and confident. Therefore, I spoke with the patients in what little of the local tribal language I knew. They laughed at me because they were surprised and happy to see a foreigner trying to speak their language. Unknowingly, I had distracted them, for a short time, from their pain. It was the most horrific place I had been, but I realized that this is where I needed to spend my time in Zambia. As people brought their loved ones in wheelbarrows hoping to find them a comfortable place to die, I learned never to be fazed by a person’s physical state, but to greet him or her with compassion, to bathe and feed them, and to make their last days as comfortable as possible.
During the days I wasn’t at the hospice, I worked at the local nutrition center where I met two children who had been severely physically abused. It was obvious someone had violently hit one of the girls in the head. At that time I wished I had the medical experience to help. As I followed these children through the social system, I realized that they had two choices: return to the home of their abuser or join the thousands of street children living in abject poverty. Outraged by the lack of resources for these children, a Zambian friend and I joined forces to start a foster home for abandoned, abused, and vulnerable children. We named this foster home the Vima Lupwa Home. “Lupwa” means family, and we selected this name because we didn’t want to create institutionalized orphanages, but instead create family homes, taking no more than fourteen children into each home and raising them to honor their own culture under the parenting of a loving Zambian mother and father. After returning to the states and collaborating with my college professor, Marlena Bellavia, our project became registered nonprofit organization in the U.S. and in Zambia. I returned to Zambia to hire and manage over 200 workers to build our first family home.
On my 21st birthday we completed the home and welcomed our first foster daughter, Melody Banda. A few months later another nine-year-old girl, Mwape, having been abused joined our daily growing family. Soon we realized Mwape was mentally handicapped and had epilepsy. I spent hours at the local clinics trying to get her medication for her daily seizures. It took years for Mwape’s health to improve, and I loved being an integral part of helping her thrive emotionally and physically. Today the laughter of fourteen children who came from desperate living situations can be heard as they now have education, health care, and a loving family, and with this a renewed opportunity for a healthy and happy life.
After building the home in 2005, I started volunteering at various rural hospitals and health clinics throughout Zambia, Uganda, and war-torn region eastern Congo. These experiences fueled my growing fascination of healing the human body and the desire to study medicine. I learned the local dialects because knowing the language is the key to understanding the culture of the people and their physical needs. It became clear that becoming a physician would give me the opportunity to have the greatest impact in under-served communities torn apart by violence and corruption.
Because my parents taught me the importance of setting goals, I established our foster home despite challenging conditions. Now my goal is to become a doctor and to work as a family practitioner in under-served communities in rural and inner city areas, both in the United States and in developing countries. I am currently a first year medical student at Oregon Health and Science, where I am actively pursuing my dreams of becoming a physician to help those in need.My new 10 year goal is to become a primary care physician working in underserved communities on reservations and in rural communities while continuing my international work. As I continue to learn about and witness the challenges these communities face, I am increasingly committed to improving healthcare opportunities so that more people can receive essential healthcare education and services. I aspire to be a physician who devotes my time to listening to and educating my patients as we collaborate together to devise a personalized plan of care. As a physician I will aim to help ease the pain and provide an environment of peacefulness and hope in the midst of chaos. Because of my dedication and persistence, I knew I could open the home for children, and I will not give up until I am a physician who makes a positive and lasting impact.
What do you think? Have you done any international aid work? Why or why not? What was your experience like? Comment below!
Uggh. I think finalist #1 was a much more believable person and articulate writer. I have served on a medical school admissions committee and as judge for a national medical scholarship, and this one would have gone to the bottom of the pile.
It’ll be interesting to see what the judges think.
Don’t have the credentials you do, but I share similar feelings. While the contest was open to writing about whatever you wanted to I feel that this entrant missed the mark by not considering the audience… WCI is a financial site….if the Red Cross was running this promotion this would have been a great entry, not so much over here…
I don’t need to read any other essay. As far as I’m concerned, WCI should send this author the check now. S/he has probably done more good than I have in 14 years of practice.
I never can understand those that feel so motivated to give so much service and suffer with others and then continue to ask for helping after helping of challenges and difficulties. I am a selfish piece of crap…
Definitely a better person than me
The essay sounds like a rehashed application to medical school essay with little additional input. I may be off, but it reads like a medical school application personal statement. While this applicant has definitely done a lot of community and international need, it is hard to determine if the need is there for this current scholarship. This person likely has some sort of merit based scholarships already. Also given the plan it to be come a primary care physician in underserved areas, this often has programs available to offset costs of medical school and loans in the post graduate and post residency years.
Though the application was not well defined, having served previously on a scholarship board, I feel part of the issue is trying to determine not only who deserves a scholarship the most, but also who may be best served by the award. Further, to echo the earlier poster, this site is also based on financial savings, planning and being smart about how to plan for both short and long term financial planning. This essay does not comment on or address any of this. No doubt this person deserved and earned a spot in a respectable medical school. However I feel misses the mark a little bit for this scholarship.
Not trying to take away anything from all this person has done, but trying to objectively assess. I feel Essay #1 may appeal more to WCI readers and more in tune with the theme of the blog.
Many applications read similarly to med school application personal statements. That’s okay. I told people they could write about anything they like. I got things that ranged from personal experiences to WCIish guest posts. We’ll see what the judges like best.
” As a physician I will aim to help ease the pain and provide an environment of peacefulness and hope in the midst of chaos.”
She aspires to be a social worker. She doesn’t need an expensive MD degree from the US. The populace of Zambia, Uganda, and Congo need property rights, rule of law, fair elections and functioning courts. She offers them bandaids to assuage her affluence guilt.
I am surprised by all of the negative comments. I suppose I haven’t served as a judge for scholarship board, but I think this applicant deserves a lot of credit for going out and doing what a lot of people actually only talk about. I think we need more idealism in medicine, and I hope it isn’t squashed by medical school. Also, knowing that her medical school is one of the most expensive in the country, and that she plans to go into primary care, means she will definitely benefit from funding.
Surprised by negative comments? New to the internet? 🙂 I specifically warned the finalists about negative comments, long before any were made. Personally, I love to see the idealism of medical students, especially if it is still there by MS3/4.
I agree with MK. And to the OP, please continue to do good anyway;)
Great job on all your accomplishments and what you’ve done to serve others! Good luck with your schooling.